Fitting into this world is so difficult.
You must look a certain way
And act a certain way.
But, I do the total opposite.
Hanging out with the guys.
Dressing up like a guy.
Doing the things guys do.
I find this normal, others do not.
I fight for what is right.
No matter the consequences.
I must do what I need to do.
I need to gain respect for my family.
This is who I am,
Perfectly imperfect.
I can see that this poem does match you, but I can't tell that you are alluding to Mulan until you told me and I had to read it again.You should add a line or a special event in the movie that will make it seem more obvious that you are alluding to Mulan.
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ReplyDeleteI really like your poem & I can really see why you chose Mulan to allude yourself. What I think you can improve on, is trying to more specifically to allude to the story of Mulan. Other than that good job:)
I agree with Joy, you need to go more in-depth on the story of mulan and use a bit more allusion to describe your situation. Explain more what you are talking about, what are you fight for, why are fighting...Please make the poem stronger and avoid using basic descriptions. AS(1+)
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